Rough Outlines and a Life Plan
Before I launch into this today, I should explain what exactly I'm doing. For posterity, I suppose.
I have a Dell Inspiron 5100 laptop named Parnassus Jr. It was a graduation present, which means I've had it a little less than two years, and it's a great machine except for the fact that it decided to contract a deadly virus shortly after the warranty ran out. So I can turn it on but can't access windows, which means I can't access any of my files. I get it fixed over Thanksgiving break, but there's a great probability that fixing it will require me to wipe the harddrive, which means I will lose all of my files. This is particularly unfortunate as I have the first quarter or so of a novel which has been my baby for approximately a year and which I have high prospects for.
But there is still hope! I have a small tape recorder which I won from a game of chance at a local arcade, and into which I have given myself small notes and reminders and ideas as they come to me. Between this and my memory of the chapters I've finished, I can piece together a working outline from which I can attempt to pull together and re-write the lost manuscript, in addition to piecing together a book proposal so I can get it published soon. And so the remainder of this post will be a rough working outline for my own benefit, so I can come back to it and write in the gaps.
1. The story opens with Davin chastising Randy for being reckless; "Pink hair, Randy? Pink?!" and dressing his wounds. Zoe comes in, and there is a conversation between the three of them that sets up a rough view of the politics and introduces the main conflicts. Randy borrows Davin's clothes and leaves, and Davin realizes how distanced he is from his sister as she leaves to do homework and he watches the evening news.
2. The second chapter, Davin goes to classes in the morning; Zoe is gone when he wakes up, and he stumbles to Journalism in a sort of daze, trying to avoid the CSG solicitors and ending up with a brochure stuffed in his hand anyway. Once in journalism, the assignment requires the reading of the newspaper to critique it on established criterion--when a particular article catches his eye. A group of LMH-connected terrorists have been apprehended for the arson of the New Light Baptist Church. As Davin reads the article, he is approached by Julian, who says under his breath that there was more to the story--and mentions his sister, who worked at a planned parenthood that had been ransacked earlier, and how this may have been connected to New Light. Additionally, the paper highlights the beginnings of an important theme--the prevalence of vigilantes, and their symbiotic connection with the Coalition. Davin uncomfortably tries to get away from Julian, despite the fact that he seems to be some sort of kindred spirit, and manages to break away alone at the end of class as he goes to get coffee.
3. Davin gets coffee before his next class and sits pondering life and the CSG brochure he's found in his pocket; you get a quiet glimpse of some of his past, and the vaguest hints of discord with his father. Also, the strife between the West Coast and the rest of the US is introduced, and its personal tie-in with Davin's mother. Finally, Davin starts of for Math and notices a car with a bumper sticker from the last free election between Jon Madson and Ezra Lynch, a Madson bumper sticker. He notes that this is rather risque, and then, to cover himself, mutters beneath his breath "unpatriotic bastard" and sets off for Math wondering who was stupid enough to do that.
4. In math, we are introduced to Christina, his tutor; Davin is unnerved by the fact that she seems incredibly interested in him. He feels paranoid, as though being watched, especially considering her obvious religious bent. Give this the proper weight as an introduction, then a summary of his other classes until his biology lab gets out. As he's leaving, he finds the same car in the parking lot, being destroyed by a bunch of vigilantes. He watches from the shadows, and leaves afterwards.
5. Davin has Biology the next morning, and there's a problem with the material as they are now covering evolution. Evolution is a topic that was banned in highschools, and there is great controversy about it in college. While in Bio, we become acquainted with Jo, a member of The Underground who is also clearly rebellious but in a less-reckless way than Randy. Jo gives Davin a music-compilation of "oldies", political music from the 1980's, 90's, and 2000's, as he has a soft spot for it. This will come up and be useful later, so give it the proper weight.
6. Davin meets up with Julian again, and after Julian embarrasses and threatens their safety in the Cub (by mentioning who 'they' are, and mentioning his family's ties to the Liberal Military, and the destruction of his car the night before) they end up going for a walk and hole up behind the library in the faculty parking lot. There they get into an argument, which runs parallel to Davin's focusing on the mundane detail of a bumper sticker (honk if you understand punctuated equilibrium) on the back of a black volkswagon (ironically, the car of their bio professor). Punctuated equilibrium becomes an extended metaphor for the entire political warfare, and Davin and Julian are left at a standstill where neither is sure if they can be trusted or not.
7. A quick foray into Davin's workplace, the campus library, and exactly what sort of controls the government exerts on their life. An extensive detailing of the book-regulation system, with what books are 'monitored', and who does the monitoring. After his day of work is finished, Randy and Zoe appear to take him to the Underground meeting.
...This catches us up with where the manuscript is now.
8. The Underground meeting is tumultuous and vaguely unproductive. There is a short introduction to the mis-matched group who are part of it, and they end up discussing the arson and the world scene. There is a liberal paper who someone will have gotten their hands on in some contraband manner that they will read, and all of this information culminates in the discussion of the fact that there are, in fact, other Liberals out there who are not connected to The Underground. This will start an argument as to whether or not The Underground should start looking for these rogue liberals as new members, or if they'd be best without them. As part of this, Davin will point out Julian, and mention the discussion he got into; he'll explain that Julian knows a little about him but not enough to tie him to anyhing yet and that as far as he knows Julian will be too scared to say anything to the authorities--but also that he doesn't believe they should let people like Julian into the Underground because it would be too dangerous. This plants the seeds of what will ultimately cause the climax of the story: there is a rift in The Underground between the people who favor peaceful resistance and the people who want to perform actual acts of terrorism. They leave the meeting rather flustered.
9. Davin, upset over the Underground meeting, ends up stumbling across a gathering of the CSG, and is watching it in the shadows, utterly entranced by the concept. He's attracted to it by a certain morbid curiosity, and seems half-tempted to go join in but of course hangs back. He catches a glimpse of Christina the math tutor, and thinks she's met his eyes; he slinks into the darkness before he's identified, and is incredibly confused.
10. Davin will have some excuse to be somewhere late at night, and come across a horrifying scene--Julian, cornered by a number of vigilantes, putting up a fight. Davin will be torn about potentially trying to help him, but cannot help him--perhaps he has Zoe with him and can't risk her safety. Julian is making a scene, and a pair of Coalition members fade in from apparently nowhere--such is the eternal creepiness of their nature--and begin to arrest him. He puts up a fight, screaming at them, resisting arrest, and ends up being shot in the head by an officer, after which his body is drug off and the crime scene is cleaned up. This is the first real, solid introduction to The Coalition, and needs to be as utterly creepy and unnerving as possible. Also, it shadows a later scene wherein Christina will play a large role.
All right, that leads me a little way in--as far as I have concretely planned. Now then, the Davin/Christina romance arc:
1. Christina is watching him from math class, very intently. Davin is unnerved by this at first, and when he mentions it to Zoe, she scoffs at him for not realizing that she's attracted to him.
2. She notices his CD and asks if she can listen, and he, not wanting to draw attention to himself by refusing, allows her; she really likes it, which is a brow-quirking moment.
3. They keep nearly-brushing as Davin watches all of the numerous CSG meetings (he's an observational junkie), and he has an investigative eye on it.
4. She approaches him at one meeting, and is like, "hey, I've seen you around, blah blah" which causes some tension as he tries to evade her...
5. ...she's insistent, and ends up calling him--she knows his contact info through the math class, and can use it to her advantage. he feels sort of threatened and ends up going out with her to appease her and stop her from questioning him so much so he can keep his friends safe.
6. They have a while of dating, mostly him dodging around at all of her CSG events and trying to find his place in the world. They get along surprisingly well after awhile, and once they start learning more and more about each other he starts to feel more and more for her.
7. Randy is backed into a corner by vigilantes and Davin stands by waiting for them to leave so he can dive in for his friend's assistance; Christina comes by and asks him what he's doing, why he isn't helping, and goes to rescue Randy. Davin thinks this is impeccably cool, and Randy immediately puts up his distrustful guard.
8. Christina ends up driving a wedge between Davin and Randy, and ultimately the rest of Davin's lifestyle; he starts accepting her lifestyle because he's falling in love with her and because it's all so much simpler.
9. Davin's turned his back entirely on The Underground, and is taken to a dark place as a character; then he's given news of his mother's death, and has to go to California to retrieve her stuff--something he has an incredibly difficult time dealing with at first, especially when he gets back. He has a hard time reconciling what he's seen and making it work with he and Christina's new lifestyle and she cannot provide answers. He's bitterly confused yet again, and it's worse this time because he'd thought he had everyting worked out.
10. Randy is killed by the Coalition, and Davin's heart is shattered. He goes to Christina, seeking comfort, and she asks him why the Coalition would do such a thing--rationalizes that Randy must have deserved it. "But...why are you sad? he was a bad man, wasn't he?" Which sends Davin back to The Underground, now incredibly confused and angered.
11. We figure out that Christina's ratted Davin out and is working under cover for the Coalition, and is leading a destructive party against The Underground; they, meanwhile, are launching a blind retaliation attack on the CSG in remorse of Randy. Davin can't decide which side is worse--he has loyalties to both and is disgusted by both and doesn't see the reasoning behind any of it--and so he ends up just turning around and leaving, abandoning all of it. Climax!


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